5 min Sonnet

[copthesaint]

My classmates saw my sonnet and think its awsome. I dont belive them ;p its cheesy to me, and I spent like no time on it.Is this accually a good sonnet? Btw I did wrote this accually in 7 min. ^^ tell me what you (who ever is reading this) think. Btw I am in grade 10 and Im doing poor in english!
Hello, I'd like to say (a
How the night came so soon (b
And I am sad it's not day (a
So I sit in the night doomed (b

Evenings can be joyful (c
But also bring sorrow (d
And days are just wonderful (c
I'm just waiting for tomorrow. (d

I am crying over nothing (e
Waiting for someone to save me (f
I am following, overhanging (e
Soon she will see (f

Looming over a precipice (g
I blow her one last kiss (g

a precipice is a large vertical clift.

[saltpro15]

nice, flows pretty well. solid quatrain structure and rhyme scheme, ending couplet is good.

[Tallguy]

not a sonnet but this is one i wrote, my friends sad is was good so here it is

Hell on Earth
Those aren?t just words, its reality
The pain we?ve felt, the things we?ve seen
Evil all around, growing ever more
All feel the sweet kiss of this world
That death baring sweetness
Taste it, let if flow through your body
Let it take its course
As you see that blinding light
You will see Hell on Earth



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[copthesaint]

Dude How is that a sonnet? You must be confused.
Here are a bunch of sites to learn hoe to write a sonnet.
http://www.ehow.com/how_3335_write-sonnet.html
http://wiki.answers.com/Q/Sonnet_poem_format
http://www.answerbag.com/articles/How-to-Format-the-Spenserian-Sonnet/99ebbdf7-e76c-99c5-8356-90cc72b26319
I'd have more but there blocked at school.

[Tallguy]

Tallguy wrote:

not a sonnet but this is one i wrote, my friends sad is was good so here it is

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[apomb]

your link directs to a wikipedia article about HTTP...